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There's a little boy who walks to school,
Nobody knows his name.
No matter what he tries to do,
It is always the same.

He keeps up with all the trends,
He knows them inside out.
Each one he pulls off perfectly,
Even that selfie-photo pout.

Each week he brings a box of muffins,
Though nobody knows why.
He used to try and hand them out,
Now he doesn't even try.

He shares the muffins with the crows
and eats them one by one.
For consuming that much sugar,
He sure looks miserable when he's done.

He looks down at the empty box
and you see a little smile.
The crows fly off and he lies down;
They'll all be full for quite a while.

The same routine, every week,
I think so that he can pretend,
That in the year that he's been here,
He's made at least one friend.

©lonewolfpuppy
Well, this is the first (I think) poem I've ever written that hasn't stemmed from my emotions (At least, not conciously) or an event that has occurred to myself or someone I know. In fact, I don't even know where this came from. I was in drama and we had muffins that we were sharing and it just sort of came to me. I almost burst out in tears because of the images and words it brought to my head. I was reluctant to write about it, so I sat on it for a few days but I couldn't forget about it. So, I wrote it out and here it is.

©lonewolfpuppy

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If you like this, you should check out Who needs friends? by :icontfxman: His poem is absolutely amazing!
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DarkProphet05 Nov 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very compelling. I feel this one deep inside.
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lonewolfpuppy Nov 7, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, that means a lot to me.
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Hello! I've featured your piece here! :cuddle:



:heart: Stephany
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lonewolfpuppy Feb 6, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thankyou so much! :heart:
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You're so very welcome! ♥
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NotenSMSK Dec 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Now this was quite an amazing work. I like the writing. It is simple and expressive and while it is straightforward, it manages to convey a lot of emotions. The story is clear and the ending is beautifully written. Even during the work, a person can relate with the boy and why he might want to hand out muffins but probably no one takes them... I did have a problem with selfie-photo pout but I guess I shall have to ignore it :D Over all a great work!
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lonewolfpuppy Jul 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer

I thought that I had replied to this AGES ago!
Thank you. So much!

I am really proud of how this one turned out, and so glad that I had the inspiration, resulting in a poem not stemming from my own bottled emotions.
I don't particularly like that line myself either, but it was the thing that came to mind, and after inspection of the rhymes of "out" there was nothing else I could come up with to fit there.

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NotenSMSK Jul 25, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
You are welcome :) I guess that happens ^^;

aww, I would have liked to know how this poem came up but I guess it was 'random' inspiration :) No worries... if you want, you can change the 'out' line as well but it is up to you.
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lonewolfpuppy Jul 27, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I could, I shall see what alternatives I can come up with. :)
It came to me during a drama rehearsal when we were eating muffins a cast member had brought to share. But aside from that, the rest of it was quite 'random'.
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NotenSMSK Aug 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Well if it was random then I think you might have a good chance into reworking this.
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